Talk:Thalia Torres/@comment-76.191.57.254-20180917153020

Great story! I liked the chocie of words and really gave great explanations throughout your piece. I was having problems with writing about my emotions in my story and after reading this, I think I understand what I was doing wrong a little better. I think maybe a little less commas so it doesn't feel like there aren't so many pauses in the story but that's a nit pick, great job!

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