Talk:Julia Teixeira/@comment-76.191.57.254-20180913191641

Julia, I found your theme story to be really relatable. I think a vast majority of people who read this could relate to being dropped off at college for the first time. I think your first paragraph is really strong and brings your reader in. One line that I found really strong is in the last paragraph, "I look up at the wall and smile; slices of home." I think if you maybe moved that towards the end of the paragraph, where you say you're ready to make new memories, I think it would be more impactful on the reader.

- Thalia Torres